I happened to see a "balance" flier on a table. One side, "communication," is quite poorly written. Normally I wouldn't care about such things, but the irony of a flier on communication being poorly written drew me to write this.
Firstly, half of the statements it makes are difficult to understand on the first reading. For example:
"When we communicate we exchange ideas so that one person understands what another person is talking about."
Not only is this a run-on sentence, but it has no sub-clauses. It's very difficult to grasp its meaning. A better wording would be:
"When we communicate, we exchange ideas. This allows one person to understand the other's perspective."
Immediately below that is the following sentence:
"Now, you've heard the other person, how can you be heard?"
This would clearly be better written as:
"Now that you've heard the other person, how can you be heard?"
Finally, there is a paragraph written in thin, light red on white, grey and black. The paragraph itself is fine, but the choice of color makes it incredibly difficult to read.
I hope these comments aren't received with malice,
- Gregor Richards