Valkyria Chronicles Corrections/Suggestions
Episode 01
00:33, 18:46, 23:39
"Darksen" should be "Darcsen"
19:48
"First Europan war"
capitalization on the "w"
23:46
"Valkyur"
from the 3rd paragraph should be
"Valkyrur"
Episode 02
00:59
"Come, get on."
While ("noru", here "notte kudasai") does literally mean "to get on", it can also mean "to ride in".
Since they are getting in a tank, "Come, get in." would be more like natural English, and still retains the proper meaning.
Given Isara's polite nature, "Come, please get in." could also work, though it might detract from the urgency of the situation.
20:49
"the low prescribes"
from the 1st paragraph should be
"the law prescribes"
Episode 03
00:19
"Superior Private Young Brum"
should probably be
"Private First Class Ian Brum" (I'm positive on the rank, but not the name)
01:48
Welkin acknowledges Captain Varrot ("Ha!" or ""), but there is no subtitle.
It may have been intentional, but I thought I'd list it to be safe.
02:04
"Superior Private Susie Evans"
should be
"Private First Class Susie Evans"
02:40
"Faldio! You're Faldio!"
might be less awkward as
"Faldio! If it isn't Faldio!"
saying "You're Faldio!" seems like they've never met before, kind of like "So YOU'RE Faldio!"
03:09
"We're in the same year in university."
Could remove the contraction to remove the vagueness of whether it is "We are" or "We were",
but it's probably more of a personal preference than anything else.
The same thought applies to Alicia's line at 03:16
08:30
"reorganization"
previously spelled "reorganisation", so I assume that the use of "z" here was a mistake
11:23
"You're kidding!"
Largo's a farm man, and he's extremely unpleased with Welkin (and Isara) at this time.
I think that "Quit screwin' around!" or "Quit screwin' with me!" would be more fitting for his character.
20:50
"General Gelgen Gunther"
I'm pretty sure it was
"General Belgen Gunther"
though I don't have the game in front of me right this moment